本記事ではIELTS のライティングTASK2のサンプルエッセイ(解答例)を紹介します。トピックは会社の意思決定についてです。
サンプルエッセイ
Topic:
Some people believe that the managers should make all the company decisions, others think it is better to include employees while making decisions. Discuss both the points and give your opinion.
You should write at least 250 words.
Essay:
The engagement of employees in corporate decision-making process is widely debated in many business enterprises. Some maintain that it affords a fulfilling working experience to eager personnel. However, I do not espouse the bottom-up approach as ordinary employees are less likely to enhance the quality of management-level discussions.
If management implemented suggestions from employees, it could elicit highly supportive reactions from workers. Employees feel a great deal of self-worth when their suggestions are adopted. This feeling could exceed the sense of accomplishment they gain from their routine tasks. For example, a salesperson at a confectionery company could commit to doubling his output in promoting products once the management alters the flavor of featured products based on his suggestions. Consequently, its revenue could be increased by his commitment.
On the other hand, it is doubtful that a bottom-up approach could enhance the quality of corporate decisions. This is because executives have the qualities required in drawing up strategies, such as intimate knowledge of the industry and corporate finances. Indeed, it is common that only a handful of exceptionally talented personnel are promoted to executives. Given that, it is unlikely that inexperienced colleagues could come up with suggestions that outsmart management. What is worse, in some cases, sessions with junior colleagues could end up as merely a burden for seniors in a gruelling schedule.
To summarize, the bottom-up approach could boost the motivation of employees. Nevertheless, the effectiveness of this approach is doubtful as management has more talent and experience. Therefore, corporate decisions must be entrusted to executives.
( 256 Words )
エッセイの構成について
・Intro
→トピックのパラフレーズと自分の主張の提示。Discuss both the points and give your opinionの設問のため、平社員を会社の意思決定に関与させることの是非について述べたうえで、自分の意見を主張していきます。
・Body Paragraph ①
→ main idea : If management implemented suggestions from employees, it could elicit highly supportive reactions from workers.–と主張。その後、Main ideaの内容について、後続の文章で説明を加えていきます。
・Body Paragraph ②
→it is doubtful that a bottom-up approach could enhance the quality of corporate decisionsと主張。その後、Main ideaの内容について、後続の文章で説明を加えていきます。
・Conclusion
→Body paragraphs のパラフレーズ。
単語・文法・構文の解説
・Synonyms (類義語)
Business enterprises
Company と同義。意味は「会社」
Espouse
Support の類義語。意味は「支持する」
Alter
Change の類義語。意味は「変える」
・Key words
Decision-making process
意思決定のプロセス
Bottom-up approach
ボトムアップアプローチ。（役職の低い従業員の意見を吸い上げていく方法）
Self-worth
自尊心
Commit to -ing
–するとコミットする。
Draw up strategies
戦略を描く
・Other useful expressions in IELTS Writing TASK2
Contrastingly,
一方で、
From my perspective, / In my opinion,
私の考えでは、
Maintain
Firmly express one’s opinion と同義。意味は「強く主張する」
Aver
Say something is certainly trueと同義。意味は「―は正しいと強く主張する」
To begin with,
Firstly と同義
I espouse the former ( or the latter )
私は前者（後者）を支持する。Espouse はSupportのFormalな表現。
Having said that
However と同義。意味は「一方で」
On top of that
In addition と同義。意味は「さらに」
Under such circumstances,
こういった状況下では、
@最後に
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