IELTS ライティング タスク2 サンプルエッセイ (解答例 ) 例題 36 – School Budget

本記事ではIELTS のライティングTASK2のサンプルエッセイ(解答例)を紹介します。トピックは学校の予算についてです。

サンプルエッセイ

Topic:

Some believe that money for education should mainly be spent on better computers while others believe it would be better spent on teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

You should write at least 250 words.

Essay:

It is my opinion that educational institutions should secure generous budgets for teachers, while others may argue that performance of computers must be prioritized. This essay presents arguments on both side, but leans in favor of my initial statement.

Looking first at the case supporting competitive salaries for teachers; a large number of schools hiring talented teachers state that offering attractive salaries is the key to hiring competent teachers, which in turn leads to better educational outcomes. When sought-after teachers compare the conditions of job offers, remunerations can be a decisive factor. This is because competitive salaries give an impression that their career and personality are highly appreciated by employers. Additionally, there is little doubt that high salaries benefit employees in term of their personal finance. Indeed, according to the latest survey in Japan, affluent private schools are succeeding in retaining top-tier teachers. As a consequence, students in those schools develop better academic careers and soft skills.

Turning to the other side of the argument; digitally savvy principals claim that the cutting-edge computers are vital for students to take advantage of the latest technology. Indeed, sophisticated  IT literacy would be an asset for them in the future as a myriad of employers are seeking IT engineers. This is because new technologies are generating a range of new industries, which need a number of IT engineers to develop services and maintain systems. For example, the jobs to applicants ratio for programmers in Japan has been significantly higher than other industries. Thus, even when the majority of job seekers are struggling to find a new job due to recession or other economic factors, most programmers are in a position of choosing the best job among several job offers.

To summarize, the choice is fundamentally between the quality of real life teachers versus developing practical IT skills. In my consideration, to address the variety of needs of students, it is better to improve the quality of traditional classes by hiring excellent teachers with competitive salaries.

( 332 words )

エッセイの構成について

Intro

→トピックのパラフレーズと自分の主張の提示。Discuss both views and give your opinion.と問われているため、学校の予算を先生/コンピューターのどちらに使うべきか、自分の意見を主張します。

Body Paragraph

→ main idea  : offering attractive salaries is the key to hiring competent teachers, which in turn leads to better educational outcomes.と主張。

その後、Main ideaの内容について、後続の文章で説明を加えていきます。

Body Paragraph

→ main idea  : the cutting-edge computers are vital for students to take advantage of the latest technology.と主張。

その後、Main ideaの内容について、後続の文章で説明を加えていきます。

Conclusion

→Body paragraphs のパラフレーズ。

単語・文法・構文の解説

Key words

Secure Budget : 予算を確保する

Competitive salary : 魅力的な給料 (優秀な人材を採用する競争力のある給料)

Educational outcomes: 教育の成果

The key to -ing/noun : – するための鍵となる

Sought-after teachers : 引っ張りだこの先生 ( 色んな企業が欲している先生)

Conditions of job offers : 雇用契約の条件

Remunerations : 報酬

A decisive factor : 決定的な要因

Top-tier teachers : 超一流の先生

Digitally savvy principals : ITに精通した校長先生

Cutting-edge computers: 最新のコンピューター

IT literacy : ITリテラシー ( コンピューターを使いこなす能力)

The jobs to the applicants ratio : 求人倍率 ( 求人数/求職者数 )

Recession : 不景気

 Other useful expressions in IELTS Writing TASK2

Contrastingly, : 一方で、

From my perspective, / In my opinion, :私の考えでは、

Maintain  : Firmly express one’s opinion と同義。意味は「強く主張する」

Aver  : Say something is certainly trueと同義。意味は「―は正しいと強く主張する」

I espouse the former ( or the latter ) : 私は前者(後者)を支持する。Espouse はSupportのFormalな表現。

Having said that :  However と同義。意味は「一方で」

On top of that : In addition と同義。意味は「さらに」

Under such circumstances, :こういった状況下では、

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