IELTS ライティング TASK2 サンプルエッセイ ( 解答例) 例題 18 – Animals kept in zoos

本記事ではIELTS のライティングTASK2のサンプルエッセイ(解答例)を紹介します。トピックは動物園で野生動物を飼育することについてです。

1 サンプルエッセイ

Topic:

Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should write at least 250 words.

Essay:

The morality and value of zoos continue to be controversial topic. Some aver that it is cruel to keep animals in captivity and on display for financial profit.  Contrastingly, others maintain that some zoological institutions succeed in preserving endangered species and the educational value of them is significant. From my perspective, I espouse the latter as the former criticism no longer applies to animal-welfare-oriented zoos.

To begin with, there is little doubt that animals feel miserable when they are kept in facilities that prioritize financial profit over the welfare of animals. These facilities tend to treat animal inhumanely and do not allow them adequate space to roam around. For example, activities of rare birds are significantly restricted in miniscule aviary. This could happen when zoo managers crave for reduced operational costs. As a result, some of them could become ill due to stress from the unpleasant environment and lack of room to fly. Under such circumstances, it is hard to justify keeping animals in captivity because their captive state is in stark contrast to their natural habitats.

On the other hand, some admirable safari parks provide ideal environments for endangered species. Considering the fact that some species find it difficult to adapt to rapidly changing environments, these facilities play a significant role in captive breeding programs and preserving critically endangered animals. For instance, Ranua Zoo in Finland generously allocates large ice terrain for polar bears so that they can roam around freely on massive ice sheets. This ensures the welfare of polar bears and assists in maintaining their population.  Furthermore, the educational value of zoos must not be underestimated. When individuals see and interact with animals, it can be a formative experience for cherishing wild animals. To illustrate this, after watching endangering giant pandas in a zoo, people become besotted and vow to donate money to protect the panda’s native habitat.

To summarize, it is understandable that some people decry mercenary zoos. However, I believe people should pay more attention to other aspects of zoos, such as preserving endangered species and provide educational opportunities.

( 344 words )

2 エッセイの構成について

Intro

→トピックのパラフレーズと自分の主張の提示。Discuss both views and give your opinionの設問のため、機密情報の開示のメリット・デメリットを述べたうえで、自分の意見を主張していきます。

Body Paragraph

→ main idea : there is little doubt that animals feel miserable when they are kept in facilities that prioritize financial profit over the welfare of animals –動物の福利よりも利益を追求する施設に捕らわれている動物は惨めだ。その後、Main ideaの内容について、後続の文章で説明を加えていきます。

Body Paragraph

トピックはOthers believe that there are good reason”s” for having zoosと理由を複数回答することが求められています。

→ main idea① : some admirable safari parks provide ideal environments for endangered species- 絶滅危危惧種に対して、理想的な環境を提供しているサファリパークがある。

→ main idea② : the educational value of zoos must not be underestimated – `動物園がもたらす教育面での価値は過小評価されるべきではない。

その後、Main ideaの内容について、後続の文章で説明を加えていきます。

Conclusion

→Body paragraphs のパラフレーズ。

3 単語・文法・構文の解説

Synonyms (類義語)

Aviary

Cage の類義語。意味は「鳥小屋」

Admirable

Deserving respectと同義。意味は「尊敬に値する」

Decry

Criticize の類義語。意味は「批判する」

Key words

Keep animals in captivity

動物を捉えておく

Animal-welfare-oriented zoos

動物の福利を重視した動物園

In stark contrast to their natural habitats

(動物の)本来の生息地と真逆の状態

A formative experience

原体験。(その後の人生に影響を与えるような成功体験など)

Become besotted

夢中になる

Other useful expressions in IELTS Writing TASK2

A continues to be a controversial topic

A は物議を醸す話題であり続けている。

Contrastingly,

一方で、

From my perspective, / In my opinion,

私の考えでは、

Maintain

Firmly express one’s opinion と同義。意味は「強く主張する」

Aver

Say something is certainly trueと同義。意味は「―は正しいと強く主張する」

To begin with,

Firstly と同義

I espouse the former ( or the latter )

私は前者(後者)を支持する。Espouse はSupportのFormalな表現。

Precipitate

Cause の類義語。意味は「―を引き起こす」

Having said that

However と同義。意味は「一方で」

On top of that

In addition と同義。意味は「さらに」

Under such circumstances,

こういった状況下では、

To summarize,

まとめると、

@最後に

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